Kevin-

I love your new format for your narrative...well the additional space for feedback. I feel that it just furthers your narrative and expands the impact of it. I think that yours is really great :) Good job Kevin. I think that your inclusion of a comment section and even having Karen respond and clarify some things is really cool. :) I think that your including of reader response helps your narrative reach another level.

When I finished reading yours I was thinking that it reminded me of creating a piece of work. Something that looks pretty good, and then giving every person that comes to see it a paint brush and some paint and telling them to do whatever. I think that that way you are able to achieve a really cool narrative. I guess I'm rambling incoherently so I'll stop.

Good job

-Hend