Hend's Definition Assignment

And who will have won

When the soldiers have gone

From the lebanon

The lebanon

-the Human League

Some Background: Lebanese Civil War lasted 15 years. Muslim/Christian division holds the city back. Unification, necessary for reconstruction, creates interest. For example, (sample narrative of Muslim/Christian collaboration here). Exigence: seaports here, factories there, and these outposts of commerce force Muslims and Christians to reconcile their differences. Beyond commerce, the hero in this narrative is the hope that Lebanon is an entity worth rebuilding, i.e. nationalism/patriotism is the code and ethic that sounds like the patriotism we subscribe to here in the U.S.

So, for my narrative, I gave background on Lebanon, reaching out for a general audience, but tuning all the while for a specific audience that might have ears for the thesis statement of my honors project, which runs

put project thesis here

Now, let me say something about format. multimedia will include...

These bold statements, below, when submitted to testing by counterargument, begin to take shape. In other words, when I consider these other views on the claims I am developing for my project, I learn how to sequence them, and how to qualify them, or support them (with examples, outside testimony)..

Now, I will convert these prolepsis-diagrams into paragraph form. Here's my recipe, which I will abandon if audience circumstance demands that I do so:

ISSUE:

Discussion:

RESOLUTION:

First, I choose four sentences from my raw-narrative and copied them below:

The term(s) I looked for was the verb "is" and also something related to "rebuilding."

Lebanon may be small, but it has a rich history, which has had immeasurable impact on today's world.

Counterarguments and fallacies

-Lebanon's impact cannot be quantifiably measured.

-Lebanon's history is linked to the history of many other nations, and so the impact of Lebanon, herself, is not always clear.

-Lebanon's size is small relative to some nations but it is also large compared to others.

Now in a more coherent manner of expression:

Lebanon may be a small country but it's history is shared if not dependent on the history of many other nations. This [this? what this? replace this pronoun with what it references; even though this might not seem economical, but it provides space, it makes space in face for you to compose. Repetitions are good!leaves Lebanon's impact on the world very obscure. The history may be vibrant but the richness is also called into question when it is realized that the occupation of Lebanon by foreign powers has been part of the history of Lebanon for a very, very, very long time.

Beirut is essentially a city of constant rebuilding and renovation.

Counterarguments and fallacies

-Renovations and rebuilding are aspects that every country, heck any city must do.

-Beirut is a city of perpetual rebuilding for a very good reason which is connected to her history.

-One could argue that Beirut is not really renovating but rather rebuilding up to the new current code. The renovations could be an aspect of the rebuilding rather than a separate category.

Now in a more coherent manner of expression:

Beirut's reasons for rebuilding are key to understanding this sentence. Rebuilding to remain youthful looking versus rebuilding to reconstruct and replace damaged buildings that were leveled during a long, long civil war have very different meanings. The reconstruction of Lebanon would include some form of renovations as people tend to prefer new styles and design as compared to old styles and so without any barriers, why not go for the new sexy style than the antiquated one? Also, rebuilding is something that every city experiences as that is a sign that the city is alive and there are people inside of it.

Forever changing and reinventing itself, Beirut has a lasting legacy in the world today.

Counterarguments and fallacies

-Beirut is not changing on her own urging.

-The legacy of Beirut is linked to the history of Beirut which is tied into the history of many other past "occupying countries."

-The city is not really reinventing itself, but rather solely rebuilding.

Now in a more coherent manner of expression:

Beirut is not changing just for the hey of it. Beirut has been forced into changing due to many issues including foreign occupation and civil disturbances. These events have caused Beirut to change out of necessity rather than out of want. This different is huge because if Beirut has to change solely out of necessity, this is not a good trait as the legacy is more tarnished than anything else. Furthermore, the idea of leaving a lasting legacy without mention of the role that a foreign occupying nation has played, can be very devious if read incorrectly.

Sarah Mae's Cut/Remix

Kris's Cut/Remix

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Steve's remix is better than Crystal's

Crystal's Remix

Jessica remix

The rebuilding after the civil war is probably the most amazing feat of rebuilding in modern history.

Counterarguments and fallacies

-Amazing? According to who?

-Rebuilding after any war would be quite a feat.

-This is said compared to which other countries?

Now in a more coherent manner of expression:

Beirut has been reconstructed and rebuilt after the civil war...but isn't that what most countries do after a civil war. The rebuilding of the nation cannot be viewed as amazing without any solid rationale which is not given in the paper. Furthermore, and partially due to the lack of any support for that claim, the rebuilding is not compared to any other country that has recovered from a similar civil war due to the fact that the civil wars fought in modern history have all been different from each other.

In this paper I will write to tourists

or,

in this paper I will write to architects in training

in this paper

http://www.rawilson.com/quantum.shtml