Cory-
I really liked your original so it was hard to think of a way to remix it as you can tell by my prior remixing and comments.
I know that I have already commented on your original paper, I just wanted to let you know that I really, really, really like this version. I was trying to think about how to edit this and make it better, you have done a much better job than I have suggested. Your paper contains much more details and is a little bit more...I guess the word is personable...I dunno, you are better with words than I am as your writing shows.
I really liked your introduction, especially how this is your story.
I dunno, I guess saying I liked your paper sounds pretty cheesy...but I just like how you wrapped it up and were able to express a turning point in your life with everybody with such apparent, at least with what appears to be, ease.
Also, thanks for including a picture of the bumper sticker :)
I should scoot now, but I just really wanted to tell you about what I thought about this new(er) version.
I guess I'll see you tomorrow,
Good Job again :)
-Hend
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